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another great story from Markelly. 5*

A very good series that just tailed off a little in the final instalment although still some very moving scenes.

Well, damn it! I never came back and left a longer comment as I promised! I must be losing it...

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Liesma Horseface must partially fulfill a comic relief need, as even Guenna doesn't consider her ugly. It is funny however when Giedra complains about Liesma because she is clearly...

Christ on a cross do I not care about anyone in this story. It's just history in between scenes of Pilgrim getting laid.

Mal is dead?

Somehow that doesn't quite seem what this cliffhanger is going to be about. Which leaves the option of him having a badly timed regeneration, while his wife gets frantic and starts wanting to be "serviced". The two women will have to deal with that while an oblivious...

Thank you for putting your writing out there. I am enjoying the storyline and the glimpse of Hawaiian culture immensely.

You write well, like your plot. The thoughts and spoken conversation switches add a lot of texture and details to the story.

You are very kind with your information sharing: I would not have discovered Percheron’s spin-off as quickly without your introduction. Thank you!

Also: as an old fut who went to high school in Hawaii but then left to go to college (never to return), the pidgin and Hawaiian words are a real trip down memory lane.

Pretty mature if Evie to understand that there is good and bad chocolate (and good and bad sex). Also struggling with a way to embrace Gwen and tell her it will be okay even though she clearly is uncomfortable with being embraced and told it is going to be okay.

arrrggg - kicking myself - OK I straight away twigged to Rocky McGill - must have read Nancy 5 times before the light went on, getting slow in my old age (PS Lil - nah got that straight away)

Thanks for a very touching and well written story!

what a way of taking a job interview

@Roman

Worry not...this author generally resolves most everything to many reader's satisfaction. He's really good at anticipating audience interaction and rarely drops something he doesn't later significantly address; even his cliffhangers all possess purpose, and usually when the...

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Great start!

Looove the Fanny reference!

11/10!!!!!

Interesting, but the sex is so over the top that at times it gets a bit tedious as it tries to ramp up even more. A couple more chapters and I expect windows to start exploding in wildly descriptive ways with the percussive nature of the fucking.

Plot twist. Let him keep Gina.

Ok that explains why Gwen when asexual. Hopefully the regen process will help out. But she might need some mental help to get use to those feelings again.

Missing the sex

I like the writing style, making it an exciting read and deserving of five stars, but the subject matter does not appeal to me. I think you could write good cop stories with less sex, and that would interest me more.

Many thanks Hugo999

I’m looking forward to seeing how you handle Gwen, assuming the regen will cure her endometriosis. And it would be consistent with the vaccine’s paradigm that whatever meds she was considering won’t work in suppressing her desire for pain-free mind blowing sex.

The psychological...

Brilliant piece of writing twisting plots like this!

All that work just to grow old with the hoe that gleefully cuckolded him.

Ah well, it's from the cuckolds are more noble group.

Shoulda known.

Thanks. 5*, "THIS LURKER" ( who read, but can not write without spellchecker every 5 words), understands as an amateur, the outside world takes must be your priority. You will get things sorted out. BUT, we will still wait for the next episode of your storyline on bended knees....

Why am I still getting cuckold vbes. Maybe because he is still cuddling her?

She doesn't deserve comfort.

At least he decided to do something other than embrace his lovely cuckoldship.

So fun! Thank you for sharing

So here's the major movie to the Southern Uplands, meaning running into Guenna. Yay!

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Major lesson here: go directly to the offending person and it's more likely to get resolved first, rather than creating resentment first.

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I strongly believe you should become a published author! “Bodice riper” novels are a huge $$ maker. You would be successful , known, & making lots of $$.

Whatever forum you choose keep writing please, love your style!

read them all in just a few hours, hungry for more !!!

my deepest respect !

Great series quirky and thoroughly enjoyable

All - remember this is just a story....it will get to where it needs to go in whatever time AuroraIncident chooses to take us. Just enjoy a fun story that probably reminds some of us what high school was like.

LOVED finding this gem, once Eiven Cloudy-eye from Pitve joined: "Cinna was very excited. He'd used up a week's worth of words in a matter of moments." It's precisely well-placed, sarcastic or funny phrases like this set at unexpected points that make readers laugh and smile. :)

This chapter not only was way too short but also ends with the biggest cliffhanger... Why do you do this to us, poor readers?! Now I'll be thinking about next chapter throughout whole day or even worse - days!

Quite the leap of faith!

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You picture well the desperation of fighting the mercenaries, where Kolasovets sees they're being encircled and there's few ways to safely extricate themselves. A reader feels the mad dash, how the adrenaline pumps while Kolasovets and all others try...