Recent reader comments on First Time sex stories.
This kind of second person narrative makes me crazy. Narrator cannot possibly know what I'm thinking, nor what I'm doing when I'm not there. And telling me things that have happened to me, or that I've already done is an annoying waste of time. Why would you do that? I cut bait after...
All Comments/ReplyThis was very enjoyable as an erotic story. It could be a better story with a little editing. Too many minor, inconsequential details and explanations.
All Comments/ReplyI like your detailed decriptions. You are a very talented writer. Keep writing, please.
All Comments/ReplyYou’re a noob, so I’ll be gentile.
Present tense is BY FAR the worst way for an amateur writer to structure a story. Many pros have failed at that. Past tense is simpler and more natural for writer and reader.
Backstory, subtext and prior character development go along way to...
All Comments/ReplyThank you for your detailed analysis.
Kindly have a read of my other story too. I would love to hear your comments and feedback on that too.
Warm regards
All Comments/ReplyI really like this story, and hope you wiwll continue it
All Comments/ReplyReally very well written and extremely arousing. A lovely description of awakening.
All Comments/ReplyGreat story. Loved it. Please write more in the same theme. Maybe she can tell a friend who will become interested in gloryholes.
All Comments/ReplyFantastic and erotic story. Why do we not have another chapter about these two and their new relationship? So many possibilities for a fun and erotic story.
All Comments/ReplyIf you don't write professionally you could do. Very humane, perfect ending.
All Comments/ReplyI just love how we get ignored for months and months, then Chole arrives to apologize and promises to update us frequently and then says the next chapter is nigh on done, only to vanish again and leave us hanging.
She treats us with utter disdain!
All Comments/ReplySuch a beautiful encounter 💘
All Comments/ReplyWow, cant wait to read on... More of this exchange, Please!
All Comments/ReplyI can only Dream of Me, being the young lad....
All Comments/Replyhaving the memory of 'The Older' Lady's attention before, this really sent me over the top.
All Comments/ReplyWow. What can I say? All four previous comments were spot on. You obviously proofread your work. This was a pleasure to read. Great description of first time sex where the woman did take charge without being over bearing. She was his teacher when she needed to be, but was savvy...
All Comments/ReplyWhat a fantastic story. I think the BEST I have ever read. Congratulations.
All Comments/ReplySorry, but I gave it 2 stars. I liked the opening, felt like it had a lot of potential. But then it quickly got very rushed. I think the bullet-point paragraphs were distracting and the overuse of drawing out words with extra letters at the end of the story was cliche. Add the obligatory...
All Comments/ReplyWell written. You were able to fit much within the short story.
All Comments/ReplyA definite 5! I occasionally had trouble keeping the “body” straight with the person. . . a Who’s who?” I can’t imagine how talented you must be as an author to keep this straight while writing it??? Looking forward to more!
All Comments/ReplyPlease write more chapters, to this very hot story...5 Stars for sure
Hugs and Kisses Betty jo xoxo
All Comments/ReplyThere's a good story here, but it needs some polishing.
All Comments/ReplyGreat nerd fantasy - Big Dick, tutoring hotties, seduced by cheer coach and team. What's not to like. Too bad not real life.
All Comments/ReplyLoved the support and intimacy. I love anything that makes a woman be creative, involved and put herself out there to make her husband happy.
All Comments/ReplyAwesome!
I have the feeling I've read guts & gory mayhem like this before, but I'm not sure where. Beowulf, I suppose. Poul Anderson? (Nice hat-tip to him there.) And then there are James Clavell and Karl May (German, 19th century, westerns (!!) and travel adventure stories...
All Comments/ReplyVery nice! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
All Comments/ReplyVery nice! I hope we see more stories on here soon.
All Comments/ReplyIf I was them I would call the police, have them arrested. Then sue all in evolved. Then send them a wedding invitation to the jail, and move to another state.
All Comments/ReplyOmg this is so good, great job :D
All Comments/ReplyAny way to have a forum Dark Mode?
All Comments/ReplyGreat read. Time for Helen to get a finger in her ass
All Comments/ReplyI think it is excellent. I really enjoyed it.
All Comments/ReplyThis was outstanding! My first time reading this author’s work & im totally impressed. A full 5 stars for a unique story.
Bill S.
All Comments/ReplyExcellent story line and written so it is hard to put down till the end of the chapter. Really looking forward to the next chapter but I must add that I think they shouldn't keep their affair secret for very long. Just my humble opinion.
STEVE
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